(Disclaimer: I really enjoy words. I enjoy being gifted intentioned to be great work and I always will. Thank you and thank everyone. I usually keep my own relationship with words out of how I judge except for... well quite literally always.)
In short, I felt as if you both approached the image in a very similar (and well, kinda the opposite of abstract) manner. Because of that I feel uncomfortable accusing either of your pieces of being more creative. That said, there's a small, but obvious skill gap here that deserves to be acknowledged.
Above all, a story is a series of relevant details. A line that helps establish the scene is relevant if the scene isn't already established without it. I saw a lot of unnecessary lines that simply did not add any real dimension to either story and could've been replaced with truly magic moments. During both reads I was finding it difficult to care for this reason.
War VS Peace seems a neat way of framing the efforts on display. I Simply though that sn00p's piece was more gracefully written.
Vote: sn00p
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