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Old 05-20-2015, 10:43 PM   #2
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I stopped reading after the second 'passed away'
I may come back to this at a later time but out of respect I am here..
and not to be a total dick I feel like your wording is crisp
the build up of the first few lines after the intro is smooth
but that little slip up just made me feel dirty...keep writing
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