[Sharp]

Nobody battles- Crack jokes & laugh, it's what they happen to do
And now I'm part of them too since I learned I was battling you
what
It's been so long, still, I'm killing this dweeb
How could I lose to someone named after what Indians eat//
ok you've found the potential for a flip now you have to use it a little more effectively
That's nonsense- It doesn't matter what you say now
All that shit is played out, even saying that shit is played out
I dont follow
Please, take that smirk off, homie don't be lacking
Guarantee that smile ain't the only thing that's cracking//
you're flipping an idiom which is good but you can expand on that idea a lil more if it makes it hit
This is like a mosh pit with bombs bitch, don't step to me man
Cuz I'll put a slash in your throat & make room for the rest of the band
actually thought this was good

not terrible. I suspect this was a 'hes not showing' keystyle but if you want me to elaborate pm me