[Pharaohs Army]

thanks for the comments. yes, with your example.. "games until you ended it".. it was tricky to me too. first I put a comma in it-- "games, until you ended it".
Then I changed it. Took the comma out and dropped "until you ended it" to the next line.
But after reading your feed and re-reading the line, I realized, yes, that's even worse, and just put it back up there and took the comma out.

it rhymes with "frame of reference", if you draw out the former properly.

i am trying my best to "illustrate" what I am "going for". the illustration doesn't always seem to be working.

I think my biggest problem is that some lines require connectivity with the words, while others, in a sort of opposite manner, require separation/enunciation.

If I were to pluck an example I would say the line:
laced with similes richer than Saudi Arabia describing'is misery
is meant to be very connected

while the line
but it turned into a multisyllabic extravaganza.
is meant to be noticeably separated syllables

I don't think that problem is solvable on a page but I'm open to suggestions.