[IamBenT]

Man this is hotness. The only thing I would look to change is some of the verbs to improve flow and give it more
action.

This is something I am playing with/improving as well and its a process, to make your writing more muscular.

for example -

"I'm just following the path", to just Follow the Path

"staining this house"... to just Stain that shit.

not all verbs would need this just a few could make a marked difference.

This is a really dope piece.