Interesting....
NYC, Your verse starts out very nice and eventually gets so smooth
that its crazy how you put a twist to this topic and carry out an intricate piece
your grasp of your concept really draws a reader in, your vocab is well used
and you have a certain knack at just adding your twist as you progress
towards the halfway point I couldn't believe how you kept it up
At the end I was ready to read it a second time..but I digress
dead man, as usual you really brought an intriguing piece
you have a certain charm that blends well right into your verse
it enchants and often possesses a reader to beg for more
Here you do so well but end so abruptly which saddend me
its like reading a short story that's practically a haiku..
its nice but I need more...great job though
v/NYC, his verse just left an everlasting impression
both did great though
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