Greed - The story itself seemed scattered to me. I couldn't find equilibrium so I assumed it was meant to be a collage about a serial killer with complicated feelings or notions towards his family or spouse. Janet, his wife? picks up a book he's writing, a chronicle of the filthy deeds he's committed but she doesn't understand what she's reading. If he comes off as insane, it's only a credit to his stage persona. I can't decide if I like this one or not, so I'll call it 'tricky.'
PancakeBrah - What impressed me about this was the snug placement of key words, especially settings that had me picturing a scraggly teenager having fun in the woods with his friends, playing with fire and exploring a girl. It wasn't American Pie-ey, and it wasn't sappy. It was satisfactory.
Going with Pancake for a better organized, well conveyed piece that directly hit the topic.
Vote - PancakeBrah
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