Greed - in-character this works really nice with a very authentic verbiage. Now, there's a coin-flip's chance you'll write something very similiar without the topic matching up too well and I'll be less impressed in retrospect but overall, I thought this was a breeze. Dem flows tight yo.
Innovator - Nope, did not like (which might not be much of a blow since I'm guessing 'had no time sorry' wasn't part of the verse). You know what it is man - this is almost too short to critique, no development or overarching theme to take a stab at. Your wording seems fairly solid, I'd like to see it expressed within the frame of an entire piece.
No surprises, Vote: Greed
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