dead man - Not bad for a quick effort and the interpretation was cool. Just not enough here to comment on.
Certain - Inventive rhyming and the narration was on point. More rapid fire than usual which set the piece off. I got lost with the characters in the beginning but that's because it's easy for me to get lost. The different characters could've had differentiating qualities, though keeping it general is probably the go-to choice for a story overview. It'd naturally be more intimate if this were prose and you had 10x the amount of paragraphs to work with. Overall, good work.
Vote - Certain
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