Netcees - View Single Post - Week 1: Camp Bell vs. YDK [Camp bell wins, 7-4.]

Pent uP · 10-06-2014, 01:23 AM

Campbell -- the topic is boring...a little tried and true. ..I think the concept was a little disconnected from the topic. It was nice to see u attempt the lyricism that you did but I feel like it was pretty sophomoric in the end. I liked what you tries to do but I dont think the product was "There"

Ydk -- I liked the writing...it was borderline strong. The ending felt like too much...you made too much happen and it muddled the verse. Up until the end it was a steady set of ideas building up and then BOOM drop useless bombs..idk couldve been wrapped up better

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10-06-2014, 01:23 AM	#14
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,499 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862275	Campbell -- the topic is boring...a little tried and true. ..I think the concept was a little disconnected from the topic. It was nice to see u attempt the lyricism that you did but I feel like it was pretty sophomoric in the end. I liked what you tries to do but I dont think the product was "There" Ydk -- I liked the writing...it was borderline strong. The ending felt like too much...you made too much happen and it muddled the verse. Up until the end it was a steady set of ideas building up and then BOOM drop useless bombs..idk couldve been wrapped up better Vote ydk Last edited by Pent uP; 10-06-2014 at 01:27 AM.