[Adonis]

8 - I liked " the next off is a crooked design of wooden relief, and I hesitate at the door, this is the turning point", this was dope for plenty of reasons. All in all though, the flow was off and on. There were true highlights, but given the multitude of change ups (which I do appreciate and recognize) the flow skipped a beat or two to catch up. The story it self was relatively face value. Your previous works created this expectation of me having to decipher the entire verse in order to draw something definite from it, which in the end is usually satisfying whether I'm right or wrong because you made me think. this was not in that vein. The writing was solid, good use of emotion and painting a picture of a person trying to escape the every day hustle and bustle. But in the end, I will say not one of your better complete works. I assume because it was rushed, thus, not complete.

Diggs - "deadly vows/ many vows" no bueno. The story was very captivating 3/4's of the way through, and then it just sort of moved along drably. The finished product had a quick jab, but I much preferred the more series moments although humor is a good tool in these leagues, in this case I felt it took away more then help complete. The flow was decent, but you too changed it up here and there and created small windows worth of hiccups sprinkled around.

In the end I can only say my expecting a strong BOTW (battle of the week) and possible BOTY (battle of year) candidate I was left disappointed. You both have come ten times better then this effort, but the funny thing is, as I'm being highly critical; for the sake of argument (Might not be true), say these were each of your worst verses ever, I still enjoyed them.


Voting Kannon

His verse felt more complete