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Old 09-25-2014, 03:40 PM   #7
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I agree with Kin about this having a similar vibe to Common. The writing in this was a bit different than I'm used to from you, but this was still very good. The lines Kin quoted were good, but I really liked this section the most:

as we learn to be students of life and its beauty
Then we can grasp survival - why we fight for it, truly
as we learn to be students of life and its beauty
Then we can bask in recitals - as disciples of unity

Very good writing. No real critique here. Good stuff.
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