This was one sided tbh
Time - you had trouble with rhyming fa real. I see your concepts and personals but I felt you tried to jam allot into each bar. If you focus on one concept and keep it simple, you'll get this. Get a concept, right the punch then build off that punch
Plot - the bum fluff was kinda childish but I laughed. Maritime was nice tbh. And that was enough there to take it but then the rest of your verse didn't rhyme.
Vote plot for two solid hits
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