Soulstice- I like the amount that you were able to do with just the 10 lines. i feel like you gave us a very complete story that actually contained some nice imagery and characterization of your two Bonnie and Clyde type characters. i think the rhyming and flow was fine, my only problem with the writing is that there were some instances where the wording was superfluous for the same of a forced slant rhyme. the conservative crooning and invertebrate eunuch phrases didn't sit well with me
Objective- rhyming and flow was smooth, but some wording issues. the whole "sharp as a blade" line is horribly put together for the sake of rhyming. i think you have a good start or section of a topical, but as a complete piece itself it's lacking some clarity and direction for me.
Vote= Soulstice
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