UnbornBuddha's verse seemed like it had a bit of an identity crisis. Like it was being pulled into two different directions - pleasant and disturbing. Rhyming was a little spotty as well.
Eng seemed to outclass Unborn in terms of structure and the rhyming kept the pace going and made it a more entertaining piece. For the limited content, he really painted a full picture and captured a great deal of depth. I liked it immensely.
Vote for Eng for a more concise, polished effort.
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