Thread: meh... practice
View Single Post
Old 08-19-2014, 05:07 AM   #2
sral
LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS
 
sral's Avatar
 
Join Date: Aug 2014
Location: CRUMPETVILLE
Posts: 8,609
Battle Record: 28-3


Champed
- Gimmick Battle League
- The Winter Topical
- Topical Martyrs
- Lime Green Poetry Association
- Lyric Olympics
- Art of Writing League
- Guerrilla Writing League (2x)
- Black August II

Rep Power: 85899396
sral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond reputesral has a reputation beyond repute
Default

LOL not sure if 'Red Coats' are the same thing over there, but here they're holiday entertainers. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Butlins_Redcoats


So that line made me chuckle. Stand in range, cannons aimed - fifty 40 pounders shift
Para Lies? You weren't crushed & dull boy properly operated the forklift
I fucking hate Topicalists 99% of you are trolls & nerdy
My favorite Coat Tale is where you rode each others & Exited the Tourney

Those last four were good ideas, closer the best IMHO, as I'm sure the para lies thing has been used on you at some point. It just has to have been.

Opening and closing bars of the second verse were the best, really felt the last one.

Keep that pen moving!

RTF: http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=89375
__________________
- Netcees Rebuttal Tourney
- Art of Writing League (x 4)
- AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)
sral is offline   Reply With Quote