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Old 08-17-2014, 09:44 PM   #1
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The ending wasn't up to par with the whole piece for me. That's one criticism I have for this; otherwise I like personal pieces like this that create a world, characters, a landscape to grasp hold of. Children and dialogue also mixes well with literary fiction, and this medium as well. I liked the building blocks, but it could've been better, honestly. Keep working with your style.
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