Blanco Bishop: This was a good punchline, more braggadocio than punch. But the setup was garbage, especially rhyming off "yo." And I don't understand the decision to put the spaces in "seriously" like that.
Greed: That concept is great, but it was completely misused because the setup and even first half of the second line didn't connect properly. Your wording was off and failed to make it feel like a punch as much as a witty turn of phrase that was unconnected to the battle concept.
Vote: Blanco Bishop
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