dope battle. Purple i liked the wording and flow here, good shit. Thought with a little more length and focus on the character it could have been a masterpiece, whereas you jumped around too quickly for me. If you picked a few fantasies and elaborated on how they morphed the character's life from child to adulthood it could have been nasty. As it stands I feel it was slightly truncated and jumped around too fast thematically. Aiko had dope wording and more linear conceptualization. The imagery was nice, delivery excellent. Good vocab and a nice, grand yet ambiguous metaphor for marriage and divorce. I was feelin Aiko more on this.
V/ Jhene Aiko
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