Netcees - View Single Post

Pharaohs Army · 08-03-2014, 08:08 PM

i think this was dope. impressive rhyming, particularly in the first part.
IMO you should have put a space or dash between goosepimples ("goose pimples" or "goose-pimples") to help show the rhyme with "roots in her"..
"tweeter turns into the seashore" is a tongue twister, but i that's partly cuz i suck, so after a few tries it was OK... but those are minor issues, as i believe it was well done.

08-03-2014, 08:08 PM	#22
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	i think this was dope. impressive rhyming, particularly in the first part. IMO you should have put a space or dash between goosepimples ("goose pimples" or "goose-pimples") to help show the rhyme with "roots in her".. "tweeter turns into the seashore" is a tongue twister, but i that's partly cuz i suck, so after a few tries it was OK... but those are minor issues, as i believe it was well done. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 08-03-2014 at 08:15 PM.