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Old 08-02-2014, 04:26 AM   #3
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The verses did not mixed well. The collaboration almost seems as if its two different pieces altogether. I say this because of the content presented, it does not fit together. The first verse was more a narrative reflecting on the ghostly apparition, and their otherworldly cosmological representation. The last verse was more of a pompous showboating on the grandness of self.
Anyways, in terms of the content I think this was a nice read. I enjoyed the first verse more though. Decapitator's verse had a lack of substance, and originality.
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