[gitto138]

I'm having nightmares
I gotta find a way to block them now
I keep seeing demons.. who keep proceeding
to come knocking... when I'm dreaming
I gotta lock them out.. but how

After reading this part i thought it was flowing well,, i think you need to focus more on the concept rather than writing what "fits in" to rhyme.
Dude im just a beginning i suppose, but i just couldnt get into this piece, the structure was
makin it hard to follow,, keep droppin,, oh and tat kodak line,, real bad lol

I fell... and the fucking nightmare ended
That's why every time I wake I'm more demented
not use to shoes no more if they're not cemented
I seem to be fine... stable inside my mind
but I'm just pretending
cause each line written is as cursive in recursion as a vipers venom


Good line, not sure wat ya were tryin to say here though--cursive in recursion as a vipers venom