zenland; admired the flow of this jawn... you did not commit to any 1 rhyme scheme...
it was sporadic; fresh and unsettling....
great job of staying on your toes with the flows...bobbing and weaving man...
the story itself was free spirited man... it read like a runaway cargo train man
c.d.m; I could tell you read the bible man; it shows... good verse man
you lost ground after the blam line; lost your footing man...
picked it up in the end with the corners and ''looking up to me'' quote
more of that would've been dope man instead of the; vague plague
good battle. v/ zenland. flow was unqiue and story had heart.
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