Originally Posted by Sn00p
Flo Matic, you rap like you Hold Ratchets
jus an Act wit tha Cold Tactics, but you Lackin tha Whole Package
Okay. 'You rap like you Hold Ratchets'? First off, good looks on capitalizing your multies. They're that much easier to find this way. How does someone rap when he raps like he holds ratchets? Does he hold the ratchets awkwardly and thus you diss him by saying he raps awkwardly? Does his rap sound like a ratchet? Are people that hold ratchets dumb and thus, his rap is dumb? Please enlighten me. Also, you forgot to capitalize the 'rap'. It's part of your multi. By saying 'jus an Act wit tha Cold Tactics', are you trying to hit him with that? As in, insulting him? Because cold tactics seems to be some O.G. shit. Which would be more of a compliment. Or are you trying to infer that he justs acts as if he was an O.G. instead of saying he is an act with cold tactics? Also, the plural of the noun doesn't usually need a 'the', much less a 'tha'. Well, I think you're trying to say he just acts like he's wit tha cold tactics, but then why do you follow it with 'but'? So you WERE complimenting him with it. 'But' he does lack the whole package. If he lacks the whole package, that means he has nothing. But you just said he IS an act wit tha cold tactics? Hmm.
i Mold Havoc, boutta turn me back to my Old Habbits
you write Fiction, you want Friction, at best you'd get Slow Static
You 'Mold Havoc'. Damn, that's clever: You say you're 'creating destruction' -- great oxymoron right there. Good shit. And it's even capitalized, so I knew it was a multi from the start. And the punchline is good too. I mean, it has inners (Fiction/Friction rhyme perfectly too!). And the friction/static metaphor really ties the whole thing together. Props.
see, i dont "Expo" lines, i jus Expose Lines
to stretch those spines, you drivin into a Text Road Mine
So you expose lines to stretch spines? Okay. And all the while your opponent is merely driving into a text road mine? Damn. What is he doing in there? Digging for texts AND roads? Must be a tough job. Also, the 'drivin' connects with the 'road' part wonderfully. I can downright see your opponent digging up roads in his old road mine and then using those same roads to drive home on them. Nice.
i set heads on fire, not like Exoduzt when he dropped tha "Burnin Man"
im talkin bout tha flash backs Mike Jackson got every time he sipped a Pepsi Can
If only this hadn't been old when Royce did it two years ago. :(
so what now? you gone jump in this thread and Check Me?
dont you think we know you a undercover agent for LetsBeef?
I think you mean gon'. As in, the shortened version of 'gonna'. 'Gone' is a totally different word, my friend. As for the punch...Uhm. No.
fuck it, Lets Beef, better yet..Lets Meet
cuz if i ever seen you in person it would be Less Meat
It's 'saw' not 'seen' there. But I suppose you know that. Good move, trying to solidify your street credit with this nonchalant disregard for tenses. So if you meet your opponent, there would be less meat? Why? Are you trying to steal his meat? Take away his hamburgers and leave him with nothing but salad? That IS cruel, but I'm lost on why you chose to make that the focal point of your punchline.
look, im not one of these Coward Guys, got pull cuz im Down to Ride
battlin my homie was tha only time you thought of Pushin Hom Aside
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Somehow, I don't think that rhymes.
readin your verse, i caint even count how many Times i Sighed
cuz i never got High, no matter how many Lines i Tried
Yeah... We've already told you that this is not quite a novelty of a line.
so take ya rhymes off of tha market, you gettin No Sales
once i come through swangin these hammers, im like a Folk Tale
Oh, I get it. Because Folk Tales are swangin hammers... Wait... They don't! Huh? What are you trying to say then? I'm puzzled.
every thing i touch is molten, i got Lava Spits
Flo Matic is all Technology, he got Java Scripts
Everything you touch is molten? So it's already molten prior to you touching it? Otherwise, you would've said 'everything I touch melts', surely. So you're touching molten things. And what you spit is lava. So you touch your spits? Aight. And the only scripts your opponent has are Java Scripts? Damn. He hasn't even got a single verse? Because all of his lines are merely lines of code? What a nerd...
I didn't really want to look at your last two lines, as I got bored... Sorry. :(
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