Frank - "just life in the prison" fluff-worded stuff like <that I read in Borat's voice for whatever (the) reason. There were other instances of blemished wording (combust is a verb under all circumstances) - though the negative nancy part of my breakdown ends right when I compliment your overall high level of wording... here. So there. Cool read, I enjoyed it.
King Ra - Again, wording (cowardice grudge?) - this piece, and you as the author of it, was more effective at painting something vivid using simpler forms of natural-sounding Ingles. Your narrative was a bit of a head-on collision with a distinct mythological flavor. I enjoyed this one as well.
Overall I'll give King Ra the nod for the narrative progress accomplished with the savages/practices/etc.-scheme
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