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Originally Posted by big baby
Getting Drunk in Washington protesting funerals with Westboro Baptists after
You forced this laughter watch you grab ya throat vomiting
Addicted to holy water promethazine ready to accept Morpheus peace offerings - Paradigm
Awesome. The wording was a bit off kilter. But that was good enough for me. I'm not that big on flow nowadays because I'm getting old. But this was pretty cool. Actually awesome insane imagery. Not exactly my cup of tea, but still good enough to give credit too. lol.
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Originally Posted by dead man
Degree in chemistry; mix hydrocloric brews; Agent Orange and Blue
Watching Neigh Palm weapons big enough to turn the whole Vietnam forest floor a fluorescent hue
nice. this kind of line is where the battle arena and om intersect on the same wavelength. good to see you back at in kin.
i think the term in is welcome was probably one of your lesser segments in this verse. but that just personal preference. the bar that big baby quoted was something fierce though. almost like you broke out for a second and touched the water. explore that more imo. you peppered this with punchlines for the most part and some were more effective than others but you are still finding a new voice after the time has passed its understandable...
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that morpheus line was one of my filler bars to be honest and kind of through in to match line counts wit neigh and vulgar but word haha I thought my Term In Is/Terminus/walking dead was fire cuz of the wordplay connection and i love wordplay lol
I think thats one of the reasons I like and hate netcees though because you can see everyone in this thread liked something different since we all come from different backgrounds/sites that put emphasis on different aspects but give props to stuff I read and im like really you give props to THAT. (ie some of these paragraph flows) rofl I think thats why people bitch about voting here since netcees is a melting pot.
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