[Lars]

I disagree, I've read your little ballerina ish before years ago so you def. have that to your arsenal.

I don't think you're as reliant, technically, on multies and rhyme scheme as I am, so I chose to make that more prominent in mine to showcase what I was doing.

Infact, there was a point in your verse where I saw you had made it more a multi-string in yours and thought you had done that deliberatly to counteract what I would do.

I laughed as I read it, maybe it was unintentional, but there you have it.

Your writing is way too formal at times, too, IMHO so I deliberately opened with something really informal sounding in the "for arguments sake, lets call 'em Alpha and Bet" thing.

It's only a slight thing, but hey, it worked...