Adonis - The flow in this was sick to me, I really liked what you did with it. The approach is radically different than what I'm used to, not only from you but from anyone. It was a slightly bizarre illustration about a website owner. Who happens to be Diode. I don't exactly know why you took that kind of a gamble, lol. I feel like you could've thought up something better, however, it was written well.
Diode - This was an okay read to me. You are a well read person and I'm sure you've read every author you mentioned in the text. The meaning of the piece was supported by the narrator's examples. I found it to be a little boring after reading it a few times. This is my main criticism. Otherwise, your rhyme schemes are smooth.
My vote goes to Adonis. He had the better verse.
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