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Old 03-03-2014, 02:46 AM   #19
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YDK- I really liked this. Your piece was more imagery than story telling but I feel like you properly described the essence of “dead souls”. While I feel you could have stepped a bit more outside the box, your flow and your wording I feel gives you the upper hand here.

INK- this was good, but if I remember correctly enough, I have seen much, much better from you. This left me wanting more and your mechanics here were not as clean as they could have been. This stalled a bit for me and I think the flow had a lot to do with it. I do however think that your use of the topic was great


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