Pancake- this verse was awesome. The imagery was amazing, flow was good, nice wording and rhyming. It was dope.
I love the story, the way you went at this topic was dope.
Math- this was pretty good, just not up to par with pancakes. Nice rhyming and flow. But the imagery wasnt there like pancakes was. So you need to work on that. I could feel the emotion in pancakes verse but not so much in yours. Though I did like the ending a lot.
Mvgt El Pancake
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