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Old 01-23-2014, 10:19 PM   #7
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whatup fice it's black. good to see you brother.

definitely felt the track and the writing alike. definitely clipped and adjusted to a more metronome friendly version of what I'm used to reading from you but thats the nature of song i suppose. i would be interested in a more free verse spoken word reading of a work of yours. emphasis would be on delivery and pacing but it could be pretty immense of done correctly..

I stay damned, no belief in a Beast,
only serpents on the surface burning freedom for peace.
I mean I'm diseased, out of focus and balance.
Still chasing. No Truth, no Opus allowed.
Still racing, feet to my knees. Hope in the clouds.

this was a dope line if not a bit contradictory on the surface.

the hook was cool too. kept a decent melody can't say much for your singing chops though lol.

this felt like a self-aware motivational anthem of sorts. i dug it man. again, good to see you around and creating still.

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