JW - This was a cool take on the topic but one thing it lacked was true emotional depth. The exchanges between mother and son were very mechanical, bordering on generic. I didn't expect the turnout, so props for tying it into the picture like that. The content in the verse was okay. I can't say I was on the edge of my seat, but it was a respectable showing.
oats - Champion level verse. The ending was an interesting turn of events. I figured the picture required you to improvise and have the bomber escape somehow. Very tight execution for this one. The way you worded lines and told the story was a pleasure to read. The references were in place where they needed to be. This was like a Tom Clancy story, highly "American" in tone if I may say so myself...but you got the job done.
Vote - oats
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