[PancakeBrah]

If you want, I could go in depth as to why this isn't good. In my opinion. It might be good to someone, but I don't really see how. But I probably won't. I'll just say it's not good and you can dismiss it as me hating on you for some reason.

Also; don't you think you might could release these shorter verses as a packaged open mic, a sort of compilation, and get more attention/feed? Readers skim the front page and see 5-6 open mics by one person and just look at another writers solo work. At least I do. You obviously enjoy writing, but this is a cypher post. A few other pieces you've posted are as well. Either flesh it out (give us a full 16 at least) or cypher it. Not saying you have to do this, just a suggestion. Food for thought, could be wrong.