I really like this type of flow from you:
"Swore to God who forged a product torn and pious, grew to 5 and formed a bond
Befriend a fellow soldier, blood brothers with an open palm
A code earned in a cut and one we swore with honor
Mortals called him Jamakha with mastered art in both katanas"
The rest of the verse verged on chaotic with content that managed to co-mingle at a moderate degree. I saw focus and rhyme scheme but not impact or relevance. I think you should capitalize on conquering all of those forces to make your pieces stronger as a whole. As a flow-for-sport verse, this was nice.
Keep doing you
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