ydk - you had my full attention until
shouldn't have to pray for the night I'll be safe; From myself;
in bed shaking my pillow case and shaving my face
With a dull razor blade I should have replaced; It's hell.
... shaking my pillow case.. and shaving my face. :| no. just.. no.
everything right after that was actually really chill. really enjoyed these...
Noose around my neck as I scream that the views nice,
I could die happily now but for you I choose spite!
I'm only an addict if you're the coke; I'm the fiend.
I just hope, it seems, that I can cope in my dreams.
that was really good. and your ending was sick. i like the way you worded it. great statement on therapy in general. but that could've been woven into the rest of your verse. overall a solid read. catchy stuff at times. deep at others. overall a blend between catchy and deep would've been mellowed out with some multies somewhere near the mid-end, if dead set on victory, with this approach.
cake - well. this is not cliche. this was not self appreciating. this was definitely not "fluffy," at all. and i really did enjoy it. just like your take on the topic. although there wasn't really any character to gasps ahold of.. you dropped a beast of a topical. and that is a statement in and of itself.
/v cake - i think he won with directness. although ydk dropped something cool, it was good in a meandering sort of way. cake dropped a concise banger for the /v imo.
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