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Old 12-03-2013, 01:35 AM   #10
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Veevee - witty. Take on topic, the alien creator in the end but begining explaining an atom to bear. Before the reveal. Solid writing, but it was a story. Lyrically, weak, poor end rhymes often but didn't lack for content. that made it different but I didn't mind.

Franker- I like the approach because it was flex-esque, I guess the kids call it "swag and flow". Some parts came offf corny but not as many as I would think consider it was a mission read. I think it had a full paragraph of extra bits and pieaces that were not nnecessary.

This is a close bout because both did very well in some aspects. I did however enjjoy the take on topic as well as executed concept

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