vulgar - powerful stuff. you really hit the topic well here. i also thought you developed each character very effectively for how short each stanza was. impressive piece.
mr. j - your approach is admirable. really focused into the characters mind. also some good mechanics. in the end i wanted a little more understanding, but i was satisifed and can say this was a good read.
/v vulgar - i feel he hit the topic more efficiently, and i also enjoyed his verse a bit more.
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