Your voice is a bit stilted, but you put content first. I can't say I enjoyed a lot of it because I don't accept Jesus into my heart, but I did enjoy the first five lines of the second stanza (even knowing what you meant by Kierkegaard's final words, which really were more his final work). I thought this was the smoothest writing you offered:
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The cycle loops, lather rinse repeat, Monday’s alarm clock reminds
That the system takes the most energy from the one of a kinds
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But it was all good and interesting. You're a good and interesting writer when you decide to invest yourself even a little.