Mr. J
decent use of multi-syllabics, but there didn't seem to be a strong focus point that really attracted my devout attention.
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aiming at the bigger picture, the one that's mixed up
scattered behind a front... this is it...huh?
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Frank
great imagery and camera work (if you see what I mean), and although I didn't like the heavy focus on the beetles for the piece itself, I did like it for the topic, therefore it works.
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[qoute]The sparrow barrels in and pounds the suspenseful space, penetrating - less than ounce of aggressive rage.[/quote]
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Branches, dead in your wake, everywhere you step and it breaks.
The deer jumps out in front of you bucking – bluffing – before it gently escapes...
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vote: frank