symetrik - I like how you used the picture. The story rung of a father's melancholy, and it was spruced with flashback memory fibers that worked. Not a "full meal" type of verse if that makes sense. You seem to enjoy offering photographs rather than albums. Overall, it was cool.
DAM - Welcome back, D. You are 80% rusty, I think, but this was a step above what I expected to read from you on your first topical back. I thought it came through successfully. Nice integration of the picture into key areas of the piece, cool tempo, experienced writing, and a satisfying closer. Good work.
Vote - DAM
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