This piece was smooth, I was feeling the emotion you put out there
made me realize how...deep....some, if not most people can be
it's a different perspective when you look at it from your POV
but it did have it's shining moments, the beginning was very smooth
I felt like if you put more thought into what you wrote, or edited it more
you would have a perfect piece, especially for as short as it would be...
nice work, keep it up
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