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Old 11-03-2013, 08:27 PM   #3
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The people eater was purple.

This requires a revision and repost requiting revisits to rate this reeking mess. I like what I thought you were trying to do, but frankly, this was not well written, mostly from a grammatical standpoint. The story was a little muddy too, as it strayed the point with bad language usage. This was an ambitious attempt, apparently aiming at accolade-riddled acceptance and approval. Write more and read more.

nice try though. Srs.
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