Ill admit you have skill as well regardless of how you take my criticism I suggest you chill
there's always room for improvement and you need little
but you should still approach every piece with an objective
yours is showcasing your strengths and the beginning of this is smooth
but you try to keep that edge too close and it helps and doesn't at times
the way you do it in your head is different from its written entirety
so some things can be moved around you'll see if you were where I am
keep it up
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