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Old 10-11-2013, 07:32 PM   #4
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Zen, You had a dope idea I thought, the flow was decent
but then it felt like you kind of slipped up after awhile
it's excusable, the piece itself was pretty dope though..
it reminded me of Gimme The Loot in a odd sort of way
dope track, dope transition from the thought to the man as well
I think it went along with the picture you two were given

NYC, You took a more abstract approach, which is dope
there's so much to what you wrote that it seems crazy
you kept the flow of your piece smooth from beginning to end
I dislike quoting when it comes to battles of the deeper variety..
but this little section

lose the line between reality, being lucid in dreams.
mad scientist mashed with toon juvenile teens.
Nasty Nicene ninja, extol immutable themes
gassy...and more ephemeral than Jupiter's sheen -
^^^dope

that just came together so nicely...


i enjoyed both pieces because...well like the other battle I read
both competitors brought a different aspect to their pieces
basically making this quite an enjoyable read for me...
both of y'all had an interesting take on the pic, this would have been a fun write for me
down to my vote it's really a tough decision..both are great pieces in there own right
but there could only be one coming out of this with the W...
I am gonna have to go with NYC...he showcased a lot in what little he wrote
not many can do that...great battle fellas...

v/NYC
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