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Old 10-04-2013, 07:22 PM   #5
Mr. J
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LOOOOOOOOL


i don't even know what to say after that first piece...
but to be fair to your opponent Zen i feel like I have to say something
Zen-I enjoyed the very thought of your piece because it has character
and not many people are willing to take it a step further & add more to it
some lack that vibe that propels their piece beyond the norm
very, very nice work my dude...kept me reading...

Innovator-Your piece had some shine to it, but I'll be honest
your opponent brought it this week and I feel you may have slighted yourself
the piece is dope, but I feel you cut it off too short & didn't put your all in
and if you did, I suggest you bring more to the table next time
the flow of your piece has this inexplicable detail that is missing
you may have suffered from it slightly...either way nice work


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