I thought it was pretty ill overall, however there were a few lines that detracted from the quality
Yep son, I dump da nickel & fuckin' w/ me I'll burn ya dead
& turn ya head to nothin' but cheese spread ova' pumpernickel
In my personal opinion, this is a poor opener for such a dope piece. I just don't feel it holds weight with the rest of the verse
That bad heart w/ track marks.. about to make da gat spark
Wearin' a cap? I'm tearin' it back how I can make ya hat part
Dope line, nice use of a multie, flows well
All u make me mad, mark ass busters ain't no friends to me
Enemies, I'm Tarzan's cousin w/ da muzzle as I descend from trees
My hard hands troubled, it's from punchin' on everything I see
Punk motherfuckas just unlucky like a number when it was 10 + 3
The Tarzan line wasn't bad, you executed it pretty well.
The next two bars were alright, I'm not feeling the last one at all though. It's basic mathematics combined with a setup. It's not that bad, just contrasts with the rest of the drop
Blarin' Jadakiss I'll take a shit, u bitches make me sick
Since u can't hold a candle, blow it out ya ass & make a wish
Dope shit, this is were the piece starts picking up in it's level of Ill
Cuz if dis is what u want.. listen, I just hit da fuckin' blunt
Off my rocker, Johnny Walker tellin' me to lift da pump & dump
Flow's on point, decent setup for the approaching onslaught of lyricism
Dis is a monster ignorance squasher, spit on a hypocrite, potna'
Slittin' a wrist, dripped in a pitcher & sippin' a vigilants lager
Da innocence slaughtered.. these niggas is pitiful martyrs
Sit in a ditch, bitch & moan as I stick dis dick in ya daughters
Dope scheme, The last line doesn't do it justice though, needs to end with something killer
Da devil has murderous ways, not to mention he's hurtin' w/ shame
Ur imperfections stand as lessons, questioning personal rage
Merciful ways? Please, I get ya wife, put her on her dang knees
Should see ya sad look when I get my sperm on her face.. jeez
The first two lines were sick as fuck, then the next two were kind of generic and not as original, switching the primary rhyme to an internal is nice, but you could have done it better.
Say I'm evil & demented, Jesus, how these ppl get offended
Tell ya bitch to suck on my penis & if I scream it's cuz I meant it
I don't need an intervention, reasons just for me to get defensive
When I squeeze da friggin' Wesson u'd be bleedin' til ya death hits
Blood gurgling, love curdling, realizing breathing is a test, it's..
A difficult thing to pass, & this Earth.. u'll be leaving w/ an F, kid
Sick multie and a good finish, the highlighted line deteriorates the quality a little but overall this was a dope drop. It has a lot of potential
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