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Old 07-28-2013, 11:53 PM   #7
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I like this especially the end clean up the grammar so it isnt distracting to the reader

as a writer i wont tell u to not break up ur lines like that but it did mess up the rhyme pattern as i read it but hey do what make sense to you :) pretty good and intriguing tho
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