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Old 02-03-2019, 11:26 PM   #1
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As I black man eyes are always on you at the store, there is no window for thievery and th4 consequences are not worth it. If you are white go head, you'll prolly just get a slap on the wrist if you say you forgot your wallet at home.

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I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund
All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee
U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs
I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage
The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart
His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up
Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave
LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!


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U in the lion's den.



U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field
AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil
If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake
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Zunto -

I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund

This was pretty nice..not much complaints here..had a nice ring to it..lol..niice..

All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee

This was okay..had a cool ring to it..nice one..

U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs

This was pretty cool..niice one..

I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage

This was dope..niice one..


The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart

lmao..this was okay..niice..

His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up

lmao..this was okay..niice one..

Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave

this was okay..needs something more here..but it was okay..

LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!

this was nice..cool bar here..niice..

Bodysnatcher -

U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field

this was pretty cool..niice one..


AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil

this was niice..dope..

If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim

this was cool..niice..

There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch

this was okay..needs something more..but it was decent..

This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean

this was nice because it was a fresh concept..niice one..

U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace

this was very niice..dope..

Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle

this was okay here..niice one..

If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake

this was okay..niice one..

overall -

dope battle guys..enjoyed it..but bodysnatcher ws connecting way more with his punches..more clean wordplay on his terms..but this was dope here..niice one..but i got to give it to bodysnatcher

v/ bodysnatcher
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Personally felt this was one of the better battles this week... But not the best. Body did so well last week I think he set his own bar too high because whilst this was still one of the better showings I felt it was slightly under par for what I expected. Hard to say if that effected my opinon when reading it but I tried to base it solely on its merit here. Zelph felt rushed in places an lost his momentum near end.

Anyway that being said. Felt body had the better concepts and z had the better wording. It's tight.

Z I liked the opener, not incredibly creative with the quote but it was funny an nasty. The flea follows the same critique. Funny nasty. Mr krabbs whale made me lol. Baby carriage is probably your best conceptually and worst for wording ironically. Side piece feels like it should be played. I can't think of an example. But yeah it definitely works. Thumbnail open her up was worded lovely. I didn't really care for the last two bars an found the body morgue one utterly lazy an devoid of any momentum you had going before it.

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Opener was ok. It wasn't crazy but as a generic it hits. Resident evil not my cup of tea tbh so reference is lost on me although I can imagine so I'm not going to put it down as a miss. Just probably will be better for people who arnt using intuition. The street fighter bar cool, bit on the swag side but I liked it. I really liked hovering over the plate because it's an American sports bar I actually fucking get. Mr clean was meh for me. Tribal necklace feels s bit like zelphs side piece where I'm sure it's played but if it is its not one I've seen in a long time an I really enjoyed how you worded it. Longhorn...now I like the idea behind this bar. But does longhorn work here?
Hated the closer tbh.

Tight battle.

If longhorn is a gun bar which is what I'm thinking your going for it's not something I've ever heard. An that's a shame because the bar had so much potential.

For me It comes to preference and on second read I preferred the laughter from zelphs then the more intricate ideas from body.

Vote Zelph but good showing both
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I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund
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All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee
MISS
U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs
MISS
I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage
HIT
The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart
HIT
His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up
MISS
Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave
MISS
LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!
OK


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U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field
OK
AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil
Ok
If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
MISS
There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch
MISS
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
MISS
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
OK
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
MISS
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake
OK
v. BodySnatcher...those opening bars from zelph were a no go for me. the comparing penis bar was weird. Almost gave you the black girl weave line but the tie ins were eh. You had some bangers but REALLY bad misses. Body snatcher had really good wording throughout nothing nasty but a lot ok/light hits. Some were better than other but his misses were way better than Zelphs.
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I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund

(Nahhh G. I feel like you shoulda ran this by someone black. Nah this missed. Not to be a asshole, but this a elementary/middle school level diss - if you went to a diverse school, you prob done heard this before and it was a trash diss then lol. Anyways it came off lazy)

All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee

(This is okay. Imo you didn’t really set up your punch. Your punch has him begging for your life and I personally think you should have put something that shifts the focus to “okay now he running away” cus the shot in the back kinda comes outta no where. Concept pretty good though)

U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs

(Lol this is pretty good. Set it up well and was funny. The whale for a daughter flip wasn’t crazy but it definitely works)

I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage

(This is FIRE. Set it up well and the circle ya crib flip is dope)

The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart

(So the side piece flips have been done quite a bit by itself, then the ratchet end the marriage has been done (ratchet flips in general just gonna be hard ti feel fresh cus they been done to death). I think this bar though putting both these together made it feel fresh and it wasn’t flipped exactly the same way as anything I’ve heard. I think take your heart is a good set up. Overall you spun this enough for it not to feel completely played but it still feels a bit played. I got this as a light jab)

His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up

(I ain’t a fan of dick lines but this is excellent writing. You set this up perfect. The comparing pics and finger fuck in the set up makes this work. Then pretty much the entire second line is part of the flip and has a double meaning. That’s a very long phrase to flip so flawlessly. Weird to call this line dope but it’s dope)

Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave

(Pretty good. Extensions/clip/weave flips been done which takes away from punch. Set up take away from punch as well imo cus it doesn’t have anything to do with punch and doesn’t transition to the punch well imo. On the positive side though that’s another pretty long phrase to flip. Pretty good body flip. For some reason I really like the “wig on body” part in particular)

LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!

(This was light to me. The flip just wasn’t complex enough in that both meanings are too close too each other. Ie there’s not 2 different meanings to “scalpel down his chest” and “at the morgue”. Only part with double meaning is “open up body”)



U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field

(Pretty good. Vote of confidence a good tie in. I like the poll pole flip. It’s been done I think once but you got “survey the field” which elevated it a bit)

AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil

(I like how you playing off your bar last week but “hesitant beagle” is really throwing me off. When I first read it i thought you meant deagle. Just sounds weird not sure what you’re going for there. Anyways dogs come through your window is fine but you didn’t do anything to really set it up. It shoulda been something in the set up about shooting through the window or tag could paint the scene as to why your shooting through the window)

If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim

(Same thing that plagued zelph in his verse in that this is a familiar concept. Arms stretch/dhalsim kinda take away from the set up. Don’t remember any breathing fire/dhalsim flip though so I thought that was good. Overall I got this landing as a jab)

There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch

(This is nice. I don’t think zelph fat right? But you still got the flip on “pig” that makes this work. Anyway hovering over the plate is a nice flip. I like the line)

This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean

(This one is okay ay best. Bald head lines are kinda played in general. I’m pretty sure the mr clean has been done in regular rap but I can’t put my finger on it so it’ll get the pass from me. Clean up the situation salvaged the bar for me)

U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace

(You set this one up very well. Skull hanging by your chest is good imagery and a good flip. This was pretty dope)

Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle

(I really wanted this to work but I can really figure out what you where going for with pull up with a long horn. I got this missing but I might just not be getting the punch)

If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake

(This is a good closer. I got on zelph for this so I gotta be equal in that your setup and punch were moving in different directions. I think you can do a set up and punch that aren’t related but you gotta have a transition in there or end the first bar with a punch. But you go from stabbing to shooting with no transition which kinda throw me off reading it. Anyways other than that this is a good line. Shot/Lift him off his feet was a pretty clean flip)



This was a tough battle to judge for me. You both had up and down verses to me. Both had very crisp execution, but some of the concepts I’ve seen before which took away from what otherwise would have been solid.

Zelph started out slow. That back to Africa bar wasn’t good - so you started off in the hole. YoI started heating up with the mr krabs but that baby carriage line was sick. I got that being LOTB. Ended the battle pretty consistent.

Body I though you started off solid. The middle too your verse is when it was more up and down. Had some high highs with the Hover the plate and the tribal necklace bar. You had some lows with the bald head bar and the longhorn bar.

I think you both were about even in consistency (both had highs and bars that were light) but I think Zelph had the higher highs.

I got Zelph squeaking out with the win.

Good battle fellas.

Mvgt Zelph
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I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage
The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart
His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up
Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave





If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake



mad close cuz zunto had some better hits but i got body with an extra hit

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I thought both verses were pretty dope. Lots of creativity, humor, punches etc. This isn't my realm at all so I might be very off with my vote but I got Body edging it.

Even tho I understand why Zunto went for penis pics instead of dick pics the line sounded a bit weird to me, beside of that it was fire.
Felt a bit uneasy about the white eyes on you line, might have just been me being a cringy white boy and overthinking "is he going over the edge or not?" Thought the following couplet was cool tho as it didn't seem as generic to me with the "go back to Africa"-bit if I should leave out the uneasiness. Enjoyed the flow throughout, overall a great verse I smiled here and there at, ok closure and a couple heavy hitters. 7.5/10

In terms of Body I definitely enjoyed the gaming references and the way they were set up (fuck those dogs tho), set ups and flow. Didn't stumble upon any lines I questioned as much and I guess that is what determined it for me as overall it's pretty close and I definitely enjoyed reading what you guys came up with. Good shit.

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BodySnatcher:

"AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil"

"There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch"

"U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace"

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"U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs"

"I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage"

"LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!"


Really dope battle here I liked a lot of both your lines, so good shit. But what zelph been talking to cashius lately super racist in those first 4 lines lol didn't mean they sucked thought the concepts were good but still wasn't feeling them. Damn idk this was super close and hard to decide this but I'm going with BodySnatcher I think zelph has giving him the best run for his money as far as opponents lately. Real good read guys, potentially BOTW.

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I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund
...lol...
All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee
...ehh...
U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs
...set up was funnier than the punch to me lol aite tho...
I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage
...its okay it's just using a baby carriage as an analogy is corny and it seems played/obv...
The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart
...prob best ratchet double entendre I've read, good wording. Props this is dope. I don't even like gun bars...
His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up
...kinda gay coulda put together better but aite...
Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave
...no...
LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!
...no...


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U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field
...I wanna like this but it hinges on the poll/pole play and I wasnt feeling that, it's an almost...
AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil
...not a fan of gun bars n it seems u like them, punch was aite...
If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
...no...
There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch
...lol, with better wording you'd be good...
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
...no...
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
...played...
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
...no...
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake
...aite...


Overall zelph had a better hits imo. Snatcher needs to work on his wording and flips.


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I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund

Lol horrible Opener Zelph

All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee

Fiya cop flip

U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs

Ehhh corny, but ok

I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage

Creative and fiya!

The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart

Nice here again

His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up

On the Bayou wave with the penis bars I see, but this it aint it tho b. Miss here

Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave

Okish here! Wig/Black girl weave concepts kinda been used a lot

LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!


Fiya closer!


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U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field

Nice opener here!

AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil

This was okish! Think it could have been worded a little better on the execution

If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim

Nice jab here bro

There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch4

Ehhh, this one kinda on the simple side for me, miss here

This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean

Baldhead/Mr. Clean joints are way outdated imo. Wording was coo tho

U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace

This was good here, seen the concept somewhere before, but still a hit for me!

Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle

Ehh, took me a minute on this one. I wanted to like this one so bad, but I just couldn't find a way too.

If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake

Cool close out here!



Yo, props to both here. Nice read from both sides overall, but here's how it is. Pretty much tied in quotes and misses, but I got to take points off from Body here cause he had some concepts that were out of date or just been used to death. So I took off points for that which gave the edge to Zelph here. Props again to both!



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dece battle. both had some shit but also some a bit played ideas..

dhalsim was a cool jab & I liked that plate line but after that the verse fell off imo.. skull necklace i thinks been done, mr clean i did too..

zelph had a cpl wack lines but I think picked up halfway w/ carriage.. ratchet an thumbnail not great but worded ok. mr krabs was eh corny... but i think u edged this out barely

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I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund
insert cringe emoji here
All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee
lolish, i can appreciate the angle.. this was okay
U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs
haha, the set-up really made this whole bar very funny/effective to me.. like the meta
I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage
the "over" part makes this a bit of a reach to me.. as unless they're in a helicopter they'd be circling around.. shouldve said roof, anyways the concept is a dope gunbar but it couldve been cleaned up imo
The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart
this is fire
His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up
haha, well executed and worded... this is good
Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave
a couple diff played concepts meshed together.. nah
LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!
nah, seems like filler.. an easy & not very effective nameplay

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U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field
okay flip for a poll/pole concept.. dece
AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil
okayish.. hesitant beagle was funny lol
If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
okay flip of an old concept, ive seen better dhalsim lines tho
There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch
"a batter" or "batters"... not trying to be a dick but ive seen this concept before.. and im not sure its all that effectvive here as its a fat punch vs a not fat guy
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
the "clean up the situation" flip was enjoyable, but this again is another flip on previous concepts that have been done
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
cool attack line, worded well
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
decent meta
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake
cool closer.. solid


Pretty tight call here, but I have Zelph.. ratchet, mr krabs and thumbnail were probably my fav concepts of the battle.. Zelph's angles were just fresher to me this go round, Body seemed to have a lot of flips on older ideas this week which is rare.. it cost him here imo..props to both

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