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Old 01-25-2014, 09:54 PM   #1
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Default NOOB HATERS - fuck you

I don't..

Hate the new guys but the new guys who hate the new guys

I say to you guys what I'm too nice to say in two lines.

I'll bare-the-blame and serenade the due rhymes..

Share-the-space and glaring gaited barricades with the true scribes.. of Dubai

But you guys (and girls) that'll talk it up and drop a dud..

Why couldn't your parents just repair it when the condom bust??

Find me at your office wearing boxing gloves..

Running up with copper colored choppers like a mobster in the autumn dusk.

Would you pop in dropping some hotter stuff?

When I'm throwing heat do you start to glow and steam like a lobster does?

Man I'm getting tired of these hypocrites,

Their dire insignificance this instant isn't seeing the proper love..

So..

I'm releasing rocks and shrubs..

Stoning these mother fuckers and forcing them to breath in a toxic dust!

Talk shit.. you're the target bitch..

Get socked an' hit unconscious and dropped in a bit of carnivorous fish!



So..

How long 'til we find your problems inside..

You promise to try and sprawl to provide..

Withdraw to comply and fall in behind the smallest of guys appalled just to find you all have combined

to compromise

The balance..

Our monopolizing talent..

Oxidized our fossilized unoccupiable palace.



dicks.
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Old 01-25-2014, 10:18 PM   #2
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You need 6 links for your 3 threads in the OM (2 for each). Welcome.
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Excuse Pent. He's so literal. As one of the two topical admins I do need you to put forth an effort in feeding some pieces if you're going to post here. No strict guidelines but if you keep posting pieces without feeding we'll close them down.
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that's no problem i'll get on it
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Old 01-27-2014, 10:00 PM   #5
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I really like the flow and the word play. This was definitely something I found unique. You have a lot of talent, keep writing!

My favorite part

"Would you pop in dropping some hotter stuff?

When I'm throwing heat do you start to glow and steam like a lobster does?

Man I'm getting tired of these hypocrites,

Their dire insignificance this instant isn't seeing the proper love.."
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