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Old 02-09-2013, 09:52 PM   #1
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Shaking heads like epilepsy when i set mics on fire like Pepsi
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Yo constantly spitting prophecies on point like isosceles
Ahead of my time like Socrates in soccer tees.
My raps are ether, fucking teachers under bleachers
Ms. jordan so we kicked it like the sneakers
But back on topic, I high like drop kicks in rockets
My cockpit in your bitches optic socket.
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This kids like big pun, but dont mistake me for a joke bruh
Put the magnum to niggas head cause them pussies getting fucked.
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Old 02-11-2013, 08:09 PM   #2
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Dope ass flex malachi I just read your other drop and you've got skills man. The first half of this was better imo and fell off starting with the ms. jordan line but all in all I'd say nice flex.

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Old 02-11-2013, 08:16 PM   #3
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Thanks man, yeah i also agree with the jordan line Lol.
Shoulda kept it out, but i feel like it shouldve been there.

thanks for feed :)
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Old 02-15-2013, 06:40 PM   #4
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Old 02-15-2013, 08:24 PM   #5
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Yo constantly spitting prophecies on point like isosceles Ahead of my time like Socrates in soccer tees.

^^^
That shit made me laugh. I liked it. Cool little flex piece. That first line seems like a big bite off of joey badass' verse on 1Train, but i dunno...
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Old 02-15-2013, 09:17 PM   #6
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Yo constantly spitting prophecies on point like isosceles Ahead of my time like Socrates in soccer tees.

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That shit made me laugh. I liked it. Cool little flex piece. That first line seems like a big bite off of joey badass' verse on 1Train, but i dunno...
yeah i heard that track but i dont think it should be counted as a bite, i just used similar concept thats like saying
thats like saying every body who starts a line with my "rhyme schemes with my rhymes hot like"
lots of people probably use it but not a bite
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Old 02-15-2013, 09:46 PM   #7
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This was as said, a cool little flex man.
My only crit is: not to overuse the word 'like'
it is replacable alot of the time with words like 'faster than' and such.
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Old 02-15-2013, 09:55 PM   #8
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This was as said, a cool little flex man.
My only crit is: not to overuse the word 'like'
it is replacable alot of the time with words like 'faster than' and such.
word lol i did overuse it a lil
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Old 02-18-2013, 02:11 AM   #9
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Good rhyming but you can expand the choice of rhyme schemes if your going for this approach. Try to use some different words to rhyme, more original is more entertaining. Malachi Thomas - Black Nostradamus was the best in that way.
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